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-====== Chapter 2: A Single Stone… ======+==== Chapter 2: A Single Stone… ====
  
 The dream came again that night, but something had shifted in the grey. The dream came again that night, but something had shifted in the grey.
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 //There is no going back now. I can never go back.// //There is no going back now. I can never go back.//
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-That realization let his body go completely. Gentle at first, then flowing like a sink drain. He could feel a free place where arcana wasn't just in rigid rules but living wild like the beasts of old. The current suddenly caught him completely, the world tore open, and the gem pulled him down over the edge. 
  
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-//author's note: make this second person again...// 
  
-You fall through color and emotion.+That realization lets your fingers loosen. The rigid academy forms unspool from your mind, and suddenly you are no longer watching yourself make a choice. The world tears open. The gem pulls you over the edge, and you fall through color and emotion.
  
-The flat grey of Myrah is gone; replaced with something violent and alive. Streaks of deep green, wet earth brown, and a blue so sharp it hurts. Your eyes aren't open but you can see everything. The current wraps around you, warm and laughing, pulling you through this place. For one endless moment, you feel the stone in your hand pulse like a second heart.+The flat grey of Myrah is gone; replaced with something violent and alive. Streaks of deep green, wet earth brown, and a blue so sharp it hurts. Your eyes aren't open but you can see everything. You see wild beasts made of energy. You feel arcana that isn't just available with rigid rules, but actually LIVING in the air around you. The current is wrapping around you, warm and laughing, pulling you through this place. For one endless moment, you feel the stone in your hand pulse like a second heart.
  
 For the first time you can ever remember, you smile a broad, genuine smile. For the first time you can ever remember, you smile a broad, genuine smile.
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-//Author's note: the begining fo the next chapter//+//Author's note: the beginning of the next chapter//
 Will landed hard on something that was not stone and not earth. The air that rushed into his lungs was cold and clean and tasted of rain and pine. It burned. He coughed, rolled onto his side, and opened his eyes. Will landed hard on something that was not stone and not earth. The air that rushed into his lungs was cold and clean and tasted of rain and pine. It burned. He coughed, rolled onto his side, and opened his eyes.